'Time Out' by Emily
Zoe slapped me. I slapped her back. When I looked up mum was looking angry at me and put me in time out. I tried to explain that Zoe had slapped me but she did not listen.I felt annoyed and angry at her. I started crying.It was not fair? Why won't they listen to me? I want to get out of here. Finally I got out of time out and got to explain more and it all ended out happily.
I love the beginning of your piece of writing Emily. It's one of my favourite beginnings from this writing group, because it jumps right in there and tells the reader exactly what's happening! You did a great job of putting us right in the moment. I also like the way you included the feelings that were going around inside your head. Well done! Sharon Holt
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